“This time I need an unflowered one…yes, yes any amount”,his satyriasis spoke gagging the person at other end.
After few hours when he was ’bout to turn the nob of Room no. A-435, Hotel Ashoka ; he saw his own daughter nervously waiting inside, through the flying curtains.
Stunned. Bedazed. He deleted the contact named ‘dealer‘ from his cell permanently. Shattered.
sometimes you see a two hour long movie and that leaves you amazed, sometimes a novel invokes your thoughts .. but these few lines can make you brain shut down for a moment thinking about the naked cruelty of human evils
Yes, indeed.Defenceless. Mercilessness.
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you write on so different(danger) topics…
i hope they will make some difference in the world one day…
good work..
keep going…
They are not danger but naked cruelties as rightly pointed out by my friend.
Either you ignore such ‘danger’ things o face’em !! Ball is in our court now.
Thank you Diana
absolutely…
they are naked cruelties
wow this is one of the most powerful and heart wrenching piece….
what a write up ..bravo
Thank you Somaji
Means a lot.
And, now, I understand why this blog is titled ‘Unspoken heart’…
I have printed 3 posts from your blog already.
This is going to be the fourth one. hey! don’t talk about copyright now!
Hehe…Thank you Kam
I won’t sue you…so just chill
I’m glad you understood why the blog is named ‘Unspoken Heart’.
When the moment of reckoning came, he just deleted the mobile number of the dealer?
No, it was his spontaneous reaction!
Rest, his confrontation with daughter…what might have happened earlier o what might happen after..is left open to viewers.
Hey, that was quite a shock to me and I am sure, that was what you had intended. Anyway, the monster has been paid back handsomely for his deeds. There was no way he could have retrieved his daughter from the mire he himself had worked up.
Good work, Abhijeet.
Thanks a lot, sir
Your appreciation means a lot!!
The title: led me to believe that there is gonna be some story about the ‘seeing’ part of an arranged marriage or something.. but this was an absolute shocker. Well done! I don’t think there would have been any confrontations. If they had, it would get VERY ugly. …
Moreover, the mere thought is disgusting. Yet, we all know how this persists in a hypocratic society that pushes evils below the table and covers it all up, to show to a ‘modern fast’ world that it is so pristine and sacred.
Yet, it is not as ‘unflowered’ as it shows itself to be.
This I would term is perfect powerful brevity.
Well…the title indeed, is apt for many many stories.
Unflowered is the adjective directed at monster’s daughter i.e damsel.
Thanks a lot Punam for appreciation
Ideate as I’ve left the start as well as end, open!!
Heart wrenching and shocking….yet an ugly truth. Man you write dangerously
Thank you
‘Dangerously’ eh?? I just write true yet fictitious stories
Subtle.Cruel.Real.
Thank you sharvani
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Only a good writer can say big things in fewer words……u did it …….the best thing i have ever read………..!!
Thank you so much Ila.
I’m flattered
Quite chilling. I admit I’ve read similar posts/short stories sometime, somewhere. Not an original idea, per se….
I don’t know if people have written on this before.
My muse was “Yeh Mera India”, a movie !!
I must check it out.
And it doesn’t matter if the idea was original or not. It’s a simple enough idea really. But what matters is that you handled it really well. Kudos.
my first impression looking at this post was…only these many lines? i searched for any link which might take me to real content..but after reading it i was stunned..so much said in very little words.
Good one
Thanks a lot Namita
I’m glad you liked it!!
@Face: True that !!
take a bow!
you did in two lines what others take pages to,and did it admirably!
Thank you Nabadip
I’m glad.
Title gave me an impression of some saas bahu saga…bu this was total surprise
Thank you
I love your ballsy approach towards unspoken evils like prostitution.
Thank you Sanah