Even ‘she’ is someone’s daughter !!

“This time I need an unflowered one…yes, yes any amount”,his satyriasis spoke gagging the person at other end.

After few hours when he was ’bout to turn the nob of Room no. A-435, Hotel Ashoka ; he saw his own daughter nervously waiting inside, through the flying curtains.

Stunned. Bedazed. He deleted the contact named ‘dealer‘ from his cell permanently. Shattered.




  1. Rachit Nahar · April 27, 2012

    sometimes you see a two hour long movie and that leaves you amazed, sometimes a novel invokes your thoughts .. but these few lines can make you brain shut down for a moment thinking about the naked cruelty of human evils

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      Yes, indeed.Defenceless. Mercilessness.
      Thank you for dropping by :)
      Keep visiting ‘chhota piran’ !!

  2. Diana · April 27, 2012

    you write on so different(danger) topics…
    i hope they will make some difference in the world one day…
    good work..
    keep going…

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      They are not danger but naked cruelties as rightly pointed out by my friend.
      Either you ignore such ‘danger’ things o face’em !! Ball is in our court now.
      Thank you Diana :)

      • Diana · April 27, 2012

        they are naked cruelties :(

  3. Soma Mukherjee · April 27, 2012

    wow this is one of the most powerful and heart wrenching piece….
    what a write up ..bravo

  4. Kam · April 27, 2012

    And, now, I understand why this blog is titled ‘Unspoken heart’…

    I have printed 3 posts from your blog already.
    This is going to be the fourth one. hey! don’t talk about copyright now! :)

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      Hehe…Thank you Kam :)
      I won’t sue you…so just chill :P
      I’m glad you understood why the blog is named ‘Unspoken Heart’.

  5. umashankar · April 27, 2012

    When the moment of reckoning came, he just deleted the mobile number of the dealer?

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      No, it was his spontaneous reaction!
      Rest, his confrontation with daughter…what might have happened earlier o what might happen after..is left open to viewers.

      • umashankar · April 27, 2012

        Hey, that was quite a shock to me and I am sure, that was what you had intended. Anyway, the monster has been paid back handsomely for his deeds. There was no way he could have retrieved his daughter from the mire he himself had worked up.

        Good work, Abhijeet.

  6. alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

    Thanks a lot, sir :)
    Your appreciation means a lot!!

  7. Punam J R · April 27, 2012

    The title: led me to believe that there is gonna be some story about the ‘seeing’ part of an arranged marriage or something.. but this was an absolute shocker. Well done! I don’t think there would have been any confrontations. If they had, it would get VERY ugly. …
    Moreover, the mere thought is disgusting. Yet, we all know how this persists in a hypocratic society that pushes evils below the table and covers it all up, to show to a ‘modern fast’ world that it is so pristine and sacred.
    Yet, it is not as ‘unflowered’ as it shows itself to be.
    This I would term is perfect powerful brevity.

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      Well…the title indeed, is apt for many many stories.
      Unflowered is the adjective directed at monster’s daughter i.e damsel.
      Thanks a lot Punam for appreciation :)
      Ideate as I’ve left the start as well as end, open!!

  8. Anonymously Disguised · April 27, 2012

    Heart wrenching and shocking….yet an ugly truth. Man you write dangerously :razz:

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      Thank you :D
      ‘Dangerously’ eh?? I just write true yet fictitious stories :)

  9. sharvani · April 27, 2012


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  11. Ila Bisht · April 27, 2012

    Only a good writer can say big things in fewer words……u did it …….the best thing i have ever read………..!! :D

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      Thank you so much Ila.
      I’m flattered :) :D

  12. Face · April 27, 2012

    Quite chilling. I admit I’ve read similar posts/short stories sometime, somewhere. Not an original idea, per se….

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      I don’t know if people have written on this before.
      My muse was “Yeh Mera India”, a movie !!

      • Face · April 27, 2012

        I must check it out. :)

      • Face · April 27, 2012

        And it doesn’t matter if the idea was original or not. It’s a simple enough idea really. But what matters is that you handled it really well. Kudos.

  13. Namita Lad · April 27, 2012

    my first impression looking at this post was…only these many lines? i searched for any link which might take me to real content..but after reading it i was stunned..so much said in very little words.
    Good one

    • alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

      Thanks a lot Namita :)
      I’m glad you liked it!!

  14. alphaqsecc · April 27, 2012

    @Face: True that !!

  15. nabadip · April 27, 2012

    take a bow!
    you did in two lines what others take pages to,and did it admirably!

  16. maverickshree · April 27, 2012

    Title gave me an impression of some saas bahu saga…bu this was total surprise :-)

  17. Sanah · April 27, 2012

    I love your ballsy approach towards unspoken evils like prostitution.

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